My first validation letter...

Hello all,

I am getting ready to send my first debt validation letter to a CA. Here are the facts:

1. The debt is paid with a $0 balance.
2. The debt is being reported by the CA as open on Equifax with a $246 balance and closed on Experian with a $246 balance.
3. It is still being reported this way even though I disputed it with the CRA's.

So basically, I don't want my validation letter to tip them that the debt is paid. I want them to make a couple of violations that I have a paper trail proof of so I can use that as leverage to get them to delete the account off of my credit report.

So anyways, here is the letter - any suggestions would be greatly appreciated:
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Date

My Name
Address

Collection Agency's Name
Address

Re: Acct. Number: XXXXXXXX

Dear Sir/Madame:

This is a formal notice that you are inaccurately and incompletely furnishing information regarding the above-referenced account on my credit report.

I am disputing the information you are reporting and request evidentiary documentation that substantiates the information you are furnishing to the credit bureaus.

The listed item is inaccurate and incomplete, and as such represents a very serious error in your reporting. Please delete this misleading information and supply the correct information to the credit bureaus.

Under federal law, you have thirty (30) days to complete your investigation. Be advised that the description of the procedure used to determine the accuracy and completeness of the information is hereby requested as well, to be provided within fifteen (15) days of the completion of your investigation.

Sincerely,
My Name Here